March 5

100wc

So today I was doing the house painting with my dad and I asked him.

“what colour”?

He responded by saying “red”.

“Wy red” I ask.

“Because the ladder is broken and the pavement” he says

“Tell me about it”.

“We also are 2 coins short of fixing it”.

Just then the house started sinking.

“Run” he screams.

The old 60 year old building starts to crumble, the staircase snaps and the house is destroyed.

“Now were about one thousand coins away from having the house in perfect condition.

 

 

 


Posted March 5, 2019 by charlie2017 in category Uncategorized

1 thoughts on “100wc

  1. ccmizis

    Charlie
    I liked your story, it was interesting, I liked the comment at the end also “Now were about one thousand coins away from having the house in perfect condition.”
    It adds humour to your story.
    Some feedback is that you MUST proof read your work, there are many errors with your punctuation, which distracts the reader.
    “Wy red” I ask.In this sentence Why is spelt incorrectly also there is no question mark. Some suggestions, proof read your work yourself first by reading it aloud. Then get mum or dad to read it.
    You will find that this will help you find these errors and improve the quality of your work.

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